papaya86 0 Report post Posted January 14, 2005 im tryin to get a song together, finished 1/4 of it so far, wad do u guys tink of it? comments flames welcomed. Lights of Thor guide me through the fight. May ladyluck shine upon my knights. Blood and tears admist gentle warcries, grab your shinings and see them take flight. "For the grace of god!" "For great motherland!" Dogs of war blinded by the faith of christ, sweet beliefs tainted by the tales of lies. Tormented souls haunts the streets of death. Once happy nation, now the kingdom of mice. When will we see the rainbow again? When will the stars smile at us again? When will we be merry again? The price to pay for peace they say. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
papaya86 0 Report post Posted January 14, 2005 im tryin to write about the irony of war, dunno if its passable Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
N@Z 0 Report post Posted January 14, 2005 This doesn't belong in the Never ending thread so I've split it into it's own thread. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tropicalrips 0 Report post Posted January 14, 2005 feels like heavy metal stuff is that what u are writing? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
papaya86 0 Report post Posted January 14, 2005 i dunno why but it seems really like death metal, and i really hate death metal, so im wondering wads wrong with the lyrics. but ultimately im writing about those "crusaders" who kill in the name of god and the irony of how peace is attained through wars Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tropicalrips 0 Report post Posted January 15, 2005 i think the words are a little too "strong" makes it sound like stuff that a heavy metal band would write..."dogs of war" "lights of thor" "tormented souls" i hear these words from bands like Manowar...Megadepth...Slayer & Danzig Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Q00 0 Report post Posted January 15, 2005 i tot it was megadeath Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Blues 0 Report post Posted January 16, 2005 megadeth a? LOlx.. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tropicalrips 0 Report post Posted January 16, 2005 Megadeth its been so long since i was listening to heavy metal stuff...hope i can still spell METALLICA correctly Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mackie 0 Report post Posted January 17, 2005 (edited) Lights of Thor guide me through the fight. May ladyluck shine upon my knights. Blood and tears admist spellling error: change admist to amidst. Unless your knights are faggots, I don't think gentle warcries is right. I suggest Blood and tears in the coming blight, grab your shinings and see them take flight. Edited January 17, 2005 by Mackie Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
papaya86 0 Report post Posted January 17, 2005 power england~ kk will edit it accordingly Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
papaya86 0 Report post Posted January 17, 2005 mackie, i've been wanting to ask u, did u further ur studies on the english language? u've got good vocab and sentence structure, pretty amazing Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Q00 0 Report post Posted January 17, 2005 if you'd like to listen to music that might help you in writing your songs, try listening to stuff from iron maiden. the lyrics might come in very useful. oh...those guys form that band all graduated with at least degrees so the lyrics they wrote isnt just sum metal nonsense. they paint pictures of lush landscapes and great battles and strife in their music. they write about stuff that actually happened and history as well. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mackie 0 Report post Posted January 18, 2005 Thanks for the compliment payaya86. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
